Essay #3 Rough Draft (SUBMIT PEER REVIEW HERE)

Peer Review, Essay #3 

1. Read through the entire essay.  Who is the essay about? What is the 
dominant impression?  (In other words, what is the tone, feeling, mood, or emotion the story leaves you with?) If it cannot be determined, explain that to your partner here.  

2.
What is the thesis statement?  Write down the thesis statement here.  Does the essay 
name the specific subject?  

3. It is very important that the essay is 
not a biography, but rather a 
narrative of a more specific story.  Is the essay 
telling a story or a series of stories, or merely describing the person’s traits?  Explain.  

4. Is there a 
plot? Is there an 
obstacle or conflict? What is the conflict at the heart of the story?

5. How does the essay create the 
dominant impression?  Through details?  Through word choice? A single story?  Several short stories?  Or is the essay missing a narrative?  Explain.  

6. The essay should include examples of 
figurative language.  Find an example of: 

(a) a metaphor

(b) a simile

(c) personification 

(d) allusion

If any are missing from the essay, point that out here. If one is missing, can you give a suggestion? 

7. Does the essay ever go 
off-topic?  Are there any details included that stray from the dominant impression?  You’re not telling your subject’s life story, so part of your job is to pick and choose which details to include.  Indicate any details that contradict the dominant impression or do not belong in the essay. 

8. How is the 
clarity of the paper?

        Check off what needs improvement:

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· grammar __

· spelling ___

· sentence structure __

· word choice/missing words __  

· transitions __

  If applicable, note where the reader could become confused:

8. Does the paper appear to be in 
MLA format?  Is there anything about the essay’s formatting that looks different than your own?  

Make sure the essay has:

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· a heading ____

· a title ____

· 12-pt. Times New Roman or Calibri font ____

· NO skipped lines ____

· double-spacing throughout  ____

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9.  What 
suggestions that were not already mentioned do you have for improving the next draft?  

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Please use this discussion board to submit the rough draft of your descriptive/narrative essay. Save your work as a Word file and attach it in a reply using the paperclip icon. It’s very important that you save it in the correct format; we have had issues with the past two rough drafts with students not being able to open their partner’s paper. 

Some things to remember before you submit your draft: 

· Make sure it’s in MLA format, with double-spacing, an MLA heading, and a title. 

· Make sure you have an introduction paragraph that sets up the story and includes a thesis statement. 

· Remember that the essay should focus on your subject. You may be a character in the story, but make sure you’re not the focal point. 

· First person point-of-view is appropriate, but second person pronouns (you, your) are not allowed, unless as part of a direct quote. 

· Use three body paragraphs for the plot of the story. Use time transitions to keep the story moving forward. 

· Wrap up with a very short conclusion paragraph. 

· Your essay should be 2-4 pages long, with a minimum of 2 full pages. 

· Edit carefully, especially for run-ons and comma splices. 

JENNIFER JACOBS IS WHO I AM REVIEWING